Comments on: COCO 10

By: Eros

Eros — Sun, 15 Nov 2009 22:07:56 +0000

I am not surprised you made it this far Coco, I love your story and how you tell it. You have been one of my favorites right for the start. I was just trying to give you a little constructive criticism, not put you down in any way. I do hope to see you next round. Love, Eros

By: Coco

Coco — Sun, 15 Nov 2009 09:59:25 +0000

For me it means a lot to read this. Rare wisdom and natural talent… I don’t know how to respond except with thank you. Even if readers vote me off now this give me great courage.

By: Coco

Coco — Sun, 15 Nov 2009 09:51:34 +0000

Yes wedding ring scene was for me too one of favourite moments littlestar! Interesting how some want to see Frank dead and others to see alive.

Of course Eros its true correct grammar is essential and may be when I finish with project I can make more practice but for now I can’t change what I’m doing. If I knew to write completely correct I would be doing it from beginning no? I’m just as surprised like you. Never I expected to make it so far.

By: littlestar

littlestar — Sat, 14 Nov 2009 06:41:45 +0000

I think the shy, shaky little “wedding” between Ivana and Frank may be one of my favourite Coco moments so far – that was simply perfect (c:

Frank had to go. With him and Yiannis out of the way, I’m hoping Ivana finds it in herself to escape her old life, and not just let herself be dragged around by men her whole life.

If she ends up back at the Venus de Limassol, you’ll break my heart (and Ivana’s).

Best way to silence your critics – is to just keep doing what you do best, and doing it brilliantly.

I’m so glad you guys all got 1200 words this week! It really showed us readers what you can all do – and you all write so well!

By: Renata

Renata — Sat, 14 Nov 2009 00:58:18 +0000

It was an honor to be one of your characters, Coco! Besides, a cabaret woman’s life is so completely opposite of my own catholic-church lady-life, that I thought it really fun.
You deserve every single compliment!

By: Eros

Eros — Sat, 14 Nov 2009 00:29:25 +0000

Coco, I love your take on a white dove story, it’s just too bad that Frank had to be the one to get killed. Why didn’t you have Frank kill Yiannis? You still would have met the challenge. But oh well you have still managed to keep the story going with the use of the necklace. The other thing I wanted to bring up to you is that Nora is not completely wrong about your need to use punctuation as the word count gets higher it is getting harder to read and understand your work without it. I am only bringing this up because it maybe the only thing that decides this competition. I hope to see more next round. Love, Eros

By: Chris Chartrand

Chris Chartrand — Fri, 13 Nov 2009 18:19:07 +0000

Well done, Coco. It is obvious to me why you have lasted this long in the competition.

By: Kaylie Jones

Kaylie Jones — Fri, 13 Nov 2009 17:18:22 +0000

I agree with Renata on the great lines here. That is what has kept you up in the front, in my opinion. There is a rare wisdom in your prose, and a rare but natural talent for metaphor and imagery in general. You have my vote.

By: Coco

Coco — Fri, 13 Nov 2009 15:58:33 +0000

Reading all of your comments about Ivana and Frank is like reading my own thought and debate about it. Its too nice of you Renata to make me such complements especially after I make you into cabaret woman!

By: Renata

Renata — Thu, 12 Nov 2009 00:48:19 +0000

I meant ANYTHING she writes… The blog curse continues! LOL