Comments on: RHAE 7 http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/ By Constantine Markides. Essays, Journalism, Fiction, Photography, Video, Reality Shows, and other etceteras. Thu, 15 Jul 2010 21:03:57 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Tess http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-3121 Tess Sat, 24 Oct 2009 16:14:01 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-3121 host extended the deadline for you? sounds like *somebody* is host's favorite. just kidding lol! i totally loved your farewell statement rhae. especially the part about the inner voice host extended the deadline for you? sounds like *somebody* is host’s favorite. just kidding lol! i totally loved your farewell statement rhae. especially the part about the inner voice

]]> By: Rhae http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-3118 Rhae Sat, 24 Oct 2009 14:07:03 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-3118 All the best to you too, Eros and JD. Your thoughts don't go unappreciated. I just submitted my farewell statement. Although Fourth Night generously extended the deadline for me to accommodate an unusually busy schedule this past week, I was unable to devote to it the time it deserved. But to repeat the sad refrain that has come to represent the supposed health care overhaul in the U.S.: better something than nothing. All the best to you too, Eros and JD. Your thoughts don’t go unappreciated. I just submitted my farewell statement. Although Fourth Night generously extended the deadline for me to accommodate an unusually busy schedule this past week, I was unable to devote to it the time it deserved. But to repeat the sad refrain that has come to represent the supposed health care overhaul in the U.S.: better something than nothing.

]]> By: JDEvolutionist http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-3085 JDEvolutionist Fri, 23 Oct 2009 11:16:52 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-3085 BIG disappointment to see you go Rhae. Your subject was not easy, it dealt with a concept, a potentially fearful visualisation of a not too distant future based on trends that are currently observable; a warning perhaps aimed at evoking thought and awareness. You were up against, as previously discussed, more easily digested stories of human interaction aimed at stimulation of emotion. Most messages require a vehicle on which to ride in order to disseminate their content, in your case I suspect you overlooked the importance of this until rather too late in your novella; especially in a competitive environment, where the type of vehicle must appeal to the general audience!! (Importance of knowing your 'enemy' - the target audience). All the best, JD BIG disappointment to see you go Rhae. Your subject was not easy, it dealt with a concept, a potentially fearful visualisation of a not too distant future based on trends that are currently observable; a warning perhaps aimed at evoking thought and awareness. You were up against, as previously discussed, more easily digested stories of human interaction aimed at stimulation of emotion. Most messages require a vehicle on which to ride in order to disseminate their content, in your case I suspect you overlooked the importance of this until rather too late in your novella; especially in a competitive environment, where the type of vehicle must appeal to the general audience!! (Importance of knowing your ‘enemy’ – the target audience).
All the best, JD

]]> By: Eros http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-3082 Eros Fri, 23 Oct 2009 06:34:36 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-3082 Rhea, I am sorry to see you go so soon. I thought that you made great leap in your writing. You found a way to accommodate both the reads need for character and your need to distance the read from the characters by giving them arbitrary letters and numbers for reference. If any one give you a hard time about your writing style and says that it is not publishable please direct them to A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man by James Joyce. Here is a link to it. If this book can be published then your work sure can be. I think that you are a very smart and caring person Rhea. I pray that you have a blog or something out there giving you a soap box to stand on, we need more people like you out in the world saying the things you have not been afraid to say. May your life be filled with clarity and justices. Love, Eros Rhea, I am sorry to see you go so soon. I thought that you made great leap in your writing. You found a way to accommodate both the reads need for character and your need to distance the read from the characters by giving them arbitrary letters and numbers for reference. If any one give you a hard time about your writing style and says that it is not publishable please direct them to A Portrait of the Artist as a Young Man by James Joyce. Here is a link to it. If this book can be published then your work sure can be. I think that you are a very smart and caring person Rhea. I pray that you have a blog or something out there giving you a soap box to stand on, we need more people like you out in the world saying the things you have not been afraid to say. May your life be filled with clarity and justices. Love, Eros

]]> By: Constantine Markides http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-2820 Constantine Markides Thu, 15 Oct 2009 00:13:47 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-2820 By this point I too expected to be giving out larger word counts, but readers I've spoken to have opposed lengthier posts. As it is, there's enough writing for readers to contend with. I've kept it low so as not to overwhelm and alienate readers. In later rounds, when the pool shrinks, I'll increase the word count. As I said at the onset, nothing is set in stone. At least I'm not asking you to write haikus. By this point I too expected to be giving out larger word counts, but readers I’ve spoken to have opposed lengthier posts. As it is, there’s enough writing for readers to contend with. I’ve kept it low so as not to overwhelm and alienate readers. In later rounds, when the pool shrinks, I’ll increase the word count. As I said at the onset, nothing is set in stone. At least I’m not asking you to write haikus.

]]> By: Rhae http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-2795 Rhae Wed, 14 Oct 2009 03:46:41 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-2795 I know you mean it facetiously when you say you don't feel like you're more than several pages into the novel, but in fact, it's quite true. If you total the word count so far, it comes to a paltry amount. I had expected I would be getting longer word counts by this point. Had I known I would be dealing with bite-size word counts, I might have chosen a different novella (although short story is a more accurate word) to write. You can only say so much in short prose. Yes, you may say it beautifully, but still, you must work within a limited domain. That's why we receive our news in short clips. It keeps the dangerous herd from thinking. The only thing that one can do in a 60 second clip is parrot the established official line (i.e. "we must fight terrorism"). To challenge established fabrications and illusions (i.e. "we practice terrorism") one needs space and time. I know you mean it facetiously when you say you don’t feel like you’re more than several pages into the novel, but in fact, it’s quite true. If you total the word count so far, it comes to a paltry amount. I had expected I would be getting longer word counts by this point. Had I known I would be dealing with bite-size word counts, I might have chosen a different novella (although short story is a more accurate word) to write. You can only say so much in short prose. Yes, you may say it beautifully, but still, you must work within a limited domain. That’s why we receive our news in short clips. It keeps the dangerous herd from thinking. The only thing that one can do in a 60 second clip is parrot the established official line (i.e. “we must fight terrorism”). To challenge established fabrications and illusions (i.e. “we practice terrorism”) one needs space and time.

]]> By: Rhae http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-2794 Rhae Wed, 14 Oct 2009 02:29:43 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-2794 Good eye, Jay. Thanks for catching the slip. I have been consciously shifting about in tenses a fair amount but that last sentence was not an intentional one. Good eye, Jay. Thanks for catching the slip. I have been consciously shifting about in tenses a fair amount but that last sentence was not an intentional one.

]]> By: JDEvolutionist http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-2784 JDEvolutionist Tue, 13 Oct 2009 22:10:55 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-2784 Rhae, you have turned this around. I've got one more contribution to read for this round but for now you are top of my list for those who should stay, just ahead of Olaf, though I suspect some might scoff at that! Keep it up you have really upped the interest level, brought Homo Machina back into play and made it feel as though things are happening. Rhae, you have turned this around. I’ve got one more contribution to read for this round but for now you are top of my list for those who should stay, just ahead of Olaf, though I suspect some might scoff at that! Keep it up you have really upped the interest level, brought Homo Machina back into play and made it feel as though things are happening.

]]> By: Kaylie Jones http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-2766 Kaylie Jones Tue, 13 Oct 2009 14:59:11 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-2766 I had to catch up on the last few entries since I've been on the road with limited internet access, but I still like this and find it very innovative and imaginative. I had to catch up on the last few entries since I’ve been on the road with limited internet access, but I still like this and find it very innovative and imaginative.

]]> By: littlestar http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/10/rhae-7/comment-page-1/#comment-2760 littlestar Tue, 13 Oct 2009 13:09:20 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=3115#comment-2760 I like the first sentence...if only your "novella" had started off with this passage instead of the eight weeks' worth of summarising... Nevertheless, I still don't have a clue what the heck is actually going on here, or where this whole thing is going to go next. Every week, there's just something totally random from you, Rhae, and I don't really have a sense of continuity from one week to the next. The competition is halfway over, but I don't feel like I'm halfway through your story...or even past the first couple of pages, actually. "Holotov Cocktail", however, was pure genius (c: I like the first sentence…if only your “novella” had started off with this passage instead of the eight weeks’ worth of summarising…

Nevertheless, I still don’t have a clue what the heck is actually going on here, or where this whole thing is going to go next. Every week, there’s just something totally random from you, Rhae, and I don’t really have a sense of continuity from one week to the next. The competition is halfway over, but I don’t feel like I’m halfway through your story…or even past the first couple of pages, actually.

“Holotov Cocktail”, however, was pure genius (c:

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