Comments on: OLAF 7

By: Olaf

Olaf — Wed, 14 Oct 2009 17:32:50 +0000

Most of these comments are going right over my head. I just don’t know where to begin when I’m advised to start “getting even more astral” in my metaphors. Kaylie, it’s good to know that you appreciate stargazing. It’s no small thing to feel your cares lifting out of you. I don’t know what more one could want.

By: JDEvolutionist

JDEvolutionist — Wed, 14 Oct 2009 06:30:26 +0000

You may be right. However, I would suggest that not just you but everything is ‘uniquely’ unique. I think Olaf has captured a sense of this in his characters and there is therefore reality in his portrayal of a simple human story. Words perhaps but I don’t think you are understanding what I’m trying to express. Equally you may just be saying what my wife would say – “well that’s obvious”!!

By: seldom seen

seldom seen — Wed, 14 Oct 2009 00:23:44 +0000

a base uniqueness that defines us all…
please.

am i the only one who sees through that? words JD, words.

woman aren’t impressed any more with seafood, particularly crabs.

Its his story to write, but Olaf should know they want sustainability, local, free range and organic. of course they’re right to demand this.
Olaf- think conservation. Not just food either.
Its yours to win. Man up.

By: JDEvolutionist

JDEvolutionist — Tue, 13 Oct 2009 22:33:01 +0000

I liked this Olaf, there is a reality about it that I think reflects the base uniqueness that defines us all. I feel that you are capturing someones existence and it is interesting as a result, whatever the outcome.

By: Vasia

Vasia — Tue, 13 Oct 2009 19:38:39 +0000

I just want to say I’ve enjoyed the commentary here quite a bit. And though I can understand both arguments for the Astral projection not being sufficient or being sufficient, I agree with Jodi in that (for Isis’ sake) I would have liked to see him getting even more astral in his use of metaphor. Seldom Seen, apparently you disagree, but I think Tuna that was caught and brought to my door by an old flame would be very difficult to resist.

By: Kaylie Jones

Kaylie Jones — Tue, 13 Oct 2009 15:04:06 +0000

I had no problem with the astral projection. After all, this is a metaphoric milieu! I like that Olga’s daughter turns up. Your writing is good and you don’t make spelling and grammatical mistakes, as many of the others do.

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Sat, 10 Oct 2009 23:22:01 +0000

Yep – I realise the intercontinential differences now. It means grabbing in my part of the world – or as I was intending it to mean in what I wrote here, secretely spending short moments with her.

Love the language differences. Roots means something entirely different in my hemisphere and always elicits a giggle when I hear it on American movies.

By: Olaf

Olaf — Sat, 10 Oct 2009 22:28:16 +0000

Jodi: He’s been snatching with her? I don’t know what snatch means out in your parts, but it’s not what it means where I’m from. Nora can probably tell you about it. As far as all things astral, Ron lying on his back having his cares go out into the stars is about all the projecting he can manage. Maybe next time he can think about being up there among the stars. And maybe even stop by the man on the moon for a short one while he’s at it.

annasbones: I’m with you on the slackers comment. They don’t extend shrimp season if the weather’s bad.

seldom seen: Weeker by each post? You’re three days off. It’s every 10 days, not 7. As far as Ron being a washed up fishing guy, maybe you should stick to things you know, which as far as I can tell are paper pushing and imaginary seaweed. Although then again, spelling ain’t your strong suit, so maybe just stick to seaweed fairytales.

By: seldom seen

seldom seen — Sat, 10 Oct 2009 19:34:48 +0000

annasbones, that soft spot you’ve developed for Olaf probably stems from pity, as his story is getting weeker by each post. honestly, the ancient mariner should stick to sea here don’t you think? the writing is not particularly linear, or, for that matter, interesting. the love struck, washed up fishing guy goes off to woo a married woman with a bag of frozen tuna? sure…
Olaf- it starts good everytime and just goes south. maybe you should too.

By: annasbones

annasbones — Sat, 10 Oct 2009 02:40:12 +0000

I have developed quite the soft spot for you Olaf, and your story never ceases to keep me wanting more! Not voting you off, definitely
Can’t wait to hear the conclusion to this saga. Hope to see you in Round 8!