Comments on: TESS 4

By: Tess

Tess — Tue, 15 Sep 2009 18:48:29 +0000

i agree with coco about igor and to think he was the one who was the favorite in the twitter vote!!

By: Tess

Tess — Mon, 14 Sep 2009 18:47:18 +0000

jodi that’s what i thought about sex toy shopping the first time but even if you’re just browsing it’s kinda fun! maybe with somebody else i can pull off dialogue and feelings but with liz there’s no awkward silences that allow for that. she just yacks on and on! lol.
i just read your comments on dan’s site. i don’t mind if my writing is a tease. things that don’t tease are boring. i don’t know what satchiness is but i’m going to google it right now…

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Mon, 14 Sep 2009 01:39:36 +0000

I don’t think you want to go sex toy shopping with me Tess – I would spend the entire time blushing trying to find my way out!

I think you could have pulled off both Tess – the dialogue and the feelings. Often what is not said in the awkward silences between friends tells us the most. Perhaps Liz could have tried to lure her into some of those fancy dildos …. Anyway – there’s always next round and I will repost my comments from Dan’s site to mine and perhaps expand them out if I have time today.

I’m not sinking down to engage Auggie. Again I forgot how dirty and pathetic comment streams can be. I come here to enjoy the writing of you guys.

By: Tess

Tess — Sun, 13 Sep 2009 23:19:59 +0000

jodi, you really want all the dirty details don’t you! you’d be WAY more fun to go shopping with than liz! lol. you’re right, i probably should have written more about trisha’s feelings but then there would be less dialogue which is what you wanted last time!
at this point I’m less interested in my writing and more in yours and auggies! lmao

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Sun, 13 Sep 2009 11:57:14 +0000

Good to see the dialogue in there Tess and the advice on the attributions – but felt you wasted most of your 450 words running over stuff we already knew – he was a bore, her friend and flirted with him and she was miffed about that.

It seems like you gave away a chance to get some of the edge we’ve seen glimpses of. How did Trisha feel about being in the up market sex shop? We know Trisha doesn’t go all the way with blokes but does she go all the way when she’s alone with her toys? Or doesn’t she even go there?

There was one snappy line in there – how her friend should have taken up with one of the dildos instead of the lingerie.

I think you and Omar have a distinct advantage in this contest – because you can serve us up tiny vignette snap shots. You can entertain and wow us in a short space … but sadly Tess, the wow factor isn’t there this time. Hope there’s another chance for you to wow us.

By: Tess

Tess — Sat, 12 Sep 2009 17:33:07 +0000

oh my god. did i really write this last night? oh friday nights…
never. drink. again.

By: Tess

Tess — Sat, 12 Sep 2009 07:08:36 +0000

oomg littlestar is right aobut loon]ies. i’ll tell you what i think to you later craig when eveyrthing sint’ swingin swinging around. and no i’m not gong to makeout with her. uoull have ot live out htat fantasy of yours somewhere else. water water water must rememember

By: craig

craig — Fri, 11 Sep 2009 18:51:37 +0000

you’re going to get tossed if you don’t step it up. there is some serious shit going on in this competition and imagining a 22 year old rich girl in lingerie that can’t get laid is not going to make it. Somebody better get deep. And not just this girl’s boyfriend. If it’s about fucking, let’s do it. Stagnant relationships? let’s do it. witty diagloge? bring it. make it happen. kill a dog. stab it in the eye with a dillette. take the sexenergy into an MMA lockerroom. at least make out with that other lame character

By: Tess

Tess — Wed, 09 Sep 2009 14:29:48 +0000

By: Tess

Tess — Wed, 09 Sep 2009 14:28:10 +0000

did you say you work in an oilfield?! not miffed at all! i wasn’t being sarcastic, i was just wondering what you meant about the dialogue. i dont usually lol if i’m upset. lol.