Comments on: UTAH 3 http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/ Essays, Journalism, Fiction, Photography, Video, Reality Shows, and other etceteras by Constantine Markides Mon, 06 Feb 2012 00:02:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Jodi Cleghorn http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1520 Jodi Cleghorn Fri, 04 Sep 2009 03:04:47 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1520 Get used to it Utah - it will only grow as the comp continues and draws in even more readers and followers. Get used to it Utah – it will only grow as the comp continues and draws in even more readers and followers.

]]> By: Utah http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1519 Utah Fri, 04 Sep 2009 02:51:01 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1519 Thank you, Kaylie. You've been leaving some wonderful comments. I'm just coming back to Fourth Fiction after some time away and am flabbergasted by the number of comments today! Thank you, Kaylie. You’ve been leaving some wonderful comments. I’m just coming back to Fourth Fiction after some time away and am flabbergasted by the number of comments today!

]]> By: Kaylie Jones http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1512 Kaylie Jones Fri, 04 Sep 2009 00:06:06 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1512 This DEFINITELY makes it. Wonderful story, very real and solid on character. I loved the "dog star," and also love the reference to Plato's shadows on the cave wall. Brava! This DEFINITELY makes it. Wonderful story, very real and solid on character. I loved the “dog star,” and also love the reference to Plato’s shadows on the cave wall. Brava!

]]> By: Jodi Cleghorn http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1440 Jodi Cleghorn Thu, 03 Sep 2009 01:05:31 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1440 Like Olaf - I like the creative use of the "dog" prompt but found the connection pretty tenuous even with Dan's thoughts. Maybe a cool autum-ish breeze would have emphasised the connection - the end of summer (a halycon period) the passing of that time of the dog days and movement towards something more barren. Given the setting I think the weather would work particularly well for you. I didn't realise either that's where you get "dog days of Summer" - though it is not an expression we use in the Southern Hemisphere. I love your writing Utah and want to see where this mother's journey takes her, and her daughter. Like Olaf – I like the creative use of the “dog” prompt but found the connection pretty tenuous even with Dan’s thoughts. Maybe a cool autum-ish breeze would have emphasised the connection – the end of summer (a halycon period) the passing of that time of the dog days and movement towards something more barren. Given the setting I think the weather would work particularly well for you.

I didn’t realise either that’s where you get “dog days of Summer” – though it is not an expression we use in the Southern Hemisphere.

I love your writing Utah and want to see where this mother’s journey takes her, and her daughter.

]]> By: Utah http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1337 Utah Mon, 31 Aug 2009 23:40:28 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1337 Thanks, Dan. I’m glad the challenge came through in my use of the Dog Star. I agree with you yet again on the opening sentence. But I’m discovering the plot as I go along! This story isn’t developing exactly as I’d expected but I'm not unhappy with the direction. Thanks, Dan. I’m glad the challenge came through in my use of the Dog Star. I agree with you yet again on the opening sentence. But I’m discovering the plot as I go along! This story isn’t developing exactly as I’d expected but I’m not unhappy with the direction.

]]> By: danpowell http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1317 danpowell Mon, 31 Aug 2009 07:43:14 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1317 I liked the use of the Dog Star. The end of their nights star-gazing is the death. Now that I have read your last line it seems like you might have been better starting your story with the discovery of Corey having run away and the reaction to that, filling in the rest as backstory. That said, it possibly wouldn't follow the challenge requirements. All said and done, I am keen to read on. Hope you make it through the vote. I liked the use of the Dog Star. The end of their nights star-gazing is the death. Now that I have read your last line it seems like you might have been better starting your story with the discovery of Corey having run away and the reaction to that, filling in the rest as backstory. That said, it possibly wouldn’t follow the challenge requirements. All said and done, I am keen to read on. Hope you make it through the vote.

]]> By: JDEvolutionist http://www.fourthnight.com/2009/08/utah-3/comment-page-1/#comment-1312 JDEvolutionist Mon, 31 Aug 2009 06:32:26 +0000 http://www.fourthnight.com/?p=2669#comment-1312 The death of 'dog' is very tenuous but the angle, in spite of the understatement, is interesting and deserves credit - I think it makes it! The death of ‘dog’ is very tenuous but the angle, in spite of the understatement, is interesting and deserves credit – I think it makes it!

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