Comments on: TESS 3

By: Tess

Tess — Sun, 06 Sep 2009 05:51:07 +0000

poor fyor i dont even know him & i feel bad. maybe i’m just sad 2 c teh name go

*applause* 4 coco u deserved it. would someone pls take me 2 us open? looks so much fun!

By: Tess

Tess — Fri, 04 Sep 2009 05:30:53 +0000

thanks! i don’t mind the New York dating stories, but i’m not that fond of new york dating itself. did you see the cover of Time Out New York this week? It says “Meet straight, single men. They exist–on page 102!” Whoohoo. A whole city of women and a single page of men (one of them states “I like a woman who likes to cuddle.” Hel-LO… ALL women like to cuddle. That’s just code for “I like a woman who likes to cuddle with me” which means most of them don’t like to.)

OK, ok, I get the message. Dialogue coming up next time.

By: Kaylie Jones

Kaylie Jones — Fri, 04 Sep 2009 00:10:46 +0000

I like this first person voice quite a bit! Not that fond of NY dating stories, now that I’m old and married and have a tween. But I like your snappy tone and your description of this guy. I agree, more dialog instead of summation would be great.

By: Tess

Tess — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 15:47:53 +0000

thanks Auggie!!! calling my writing pure is one of the highest compliments i’ve ever received. i’m sure i do bash men but you bet i bash the girls too. we all deserve it.

you and jodi have injected new life into the comments. i can’t believe i’m saying this, but i agree with tuck… keep being nasty!

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 15:07:23 +0000

Now I’m going to consider that a challenge to write said scene to prove it is not macabre!

By: Tess

Tess — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 14:42:11 +0000

A bit of pet cremation for entree?! And you and JD are giving *Fyor* a hard time for his post!! lol

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 08:27:50 +0000

Yes I meant “leave out” … but used the Aussie colloquialism, which actually drops the “out”.

I don’t find the rest of it self indulgent or self conscious AT ALL! The tone changes in those final two paragraphs, which makes it feel as you read if self indulgent and self conscious. Maybe it becomes whimsical or something?

And as for the graveside thing – I can’t save I’ve ever been on a first date to a funeral .. but thought of it in terms of “just having to stop by here on the way to dinner” or something like that. A bit of pet cremation for entree. But perhaps that is my sick sense of humour

By: Tess

Tess — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 04:38:19 +0000

wow jodi you’re on fire tonight!! you deserve an MVP commentators award! thanks for the nice words and the tips but what do you mean about “leave the dialogue attribution.” did you mean “leave OUT the dialogue attribution” because if you did, then you left out a word…

a little too self-conscious, self-absorbed in my last two paragraphs? you mean in ALL of my paragraphs. but that’s the whole point. the whole new york dating scene is too self-conscious and self-absorbed. we’re all messing everything up and drifting from person to person because all we think about is me me me. people made fun of isis but she was right about the whole ego thing. i’m ok with the writing giving that feel. like rhae and her *mechanical* writing. it fits the mood.

By: Auggie

Auggie — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 03:45:10 +0000

i was initially biased against your writing because i thought it’d just amount to man bashing. but it turned out to be so very believable that you won me over. you are observant–a key trait for good writing.
dont worry about the critics in these comments. they are just spewing rules they learned in writing classes. ignore those preordained conceptions of what your writing should be. it is pure and that is enough.

By: Tess

Tess — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 03:41:07 +0000

first date a graveside one? i dunno what the aussie dating scene is like, jodi, but over on this side of the world we try to usually save the funerals for the second date (as in, the second date IS the funeral). lol.