Comments on: OMAR 2

By: Kaylie Jones

Kaylie Jones — Thu, 03 Sep 2009 23:59:53 +0000

Yes, of course I recognized “The Pied Piper” but also of course forgot it was Browning. Too long away from 19th Century English Lit.

By: danpowell

danpowell — Sat, 22 Aug 2009 15:55:34 +0000

Like the breaking of the conventions of the novel here. The link was neat touch. Definitely up for more, your prologue is now stretched to breaking point. Let’s see what you got next week

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Sat, 22 Aug 2009 12:32:32 +0000

Never discount the novelty factor – and both Omar and Fido have it.

By: JDEvolutionist

JDEvolutionist — Sat, 22 Aug 2009 05:01:54 +0000

This whole project, ‘Forth Fiction’, is really becoming interesting and all the contributions from the contestants are great – this included – but its about elimination and choice. Very cut throat in the end. I like the verse and the first stage was intriguing but your up against some tough competition, I’m not sure this cuts the mustard; your up against story lines I don’t like in terms of content but which retain a hold all the same. Bit more thinking required on my part!!

By: Omar

Omar — Thu, 20 Aug 2009 01:43:02 +0000

Thank you readers: Annasbone,
Felica Fredlund, Jodi, Joan;
Just do tell host, please no more tricks,
Or I will give this the deep six!

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Wed, 19 Aug 2009 23:50:56 +0000

You had my laughing at the end Omar and I think you’ve done a stellar job of winding this into your narrative and made the bridge between the 21st century and the 13th. Well done – and can’t wait for you to be able to get back to your story.

By: Felicia Fredlund

Felicia Fredlund — Wed, 19 Aug 2009 16:44:36 +0000

Oh, I’m not much for verse… Or should I say I wasn’t much for verse, but this just sings. I love it.

By: Joan Begs

Joan Begs — Tue, 18 Aug 2009 09:38:49 +0000

Lovely! And thanks for the link

By: annabones

annabones — Tue, 18 Aug 2009 09:07:10 +0000

Whoa, Omar, sweet rhymes!