No. I don’t think it was a cliche in 1875…
But I do think that the variations of this sentence: “Happy families are all alike; every unhappy family is unhappy in its own way.” are kind of exhausted today.
I am not sure if I’m allowed to comment on “outside” comments (if not, please let me know, Host) but I just wanted to congratulate Dan Powell for the fine three-part critiques. I particularly appreciated and took enjoyment in your parsing of my opening sentence: http://www.danpowellfiction.com/2009/08/fourth-fiction-first-impressions-part-3.html
The ambiguity was deliberate, but perhaps you are correct in saying that ambiguity has no place in opening sentences.
Nora
Yeah! But even a dog know how to use Google search. I have the book…
But c’mon Nora. That’s just my opinion.
If you’re a writer in this contest, I guess you gotta be open for the most diferent opinions all around the world…
And back to your sentence, I still think it’s too open and you can make this a good or a bad thing.
I wanna read more.
Good luck tonight!
Agree, we can’t really tell if these potential stories are going to be good, we have to wait for round 2 to get a better sense. In a way, it’s a good choice to have a general opening because 1) chances people will dislike it enough to vote you off are reduced, and 2) you can more easily adapt your storyline to whatever challenges are coming next…
Curious to see what Host will have them do for Round 2… hopefully not something too ‘difficult’, I also want to continue writing as a guest participant!
I agree, annasbones. Vagueness may pay off in the earlier rounds, but then again, maybe not. We’ll just have to wait and see. Host just Twittered that the video probably won’t be on the website until midnight. It looks like those of who aren’t nightbirds are going to have to wait until tomorrow morning.
Ivo, have you considered writing an opening sentence? Maybe you could show us what you mean by example…
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August 10th, 2009 at 10:45 pm
I think it’s very cliche. Too opened and nothing instigating… It seems that you wrote it just because you can go anywhere from there.
August 10th, 2009 at 10:57 pm
So do you also find the opening to Tolstoy’s “Anna Karenina” cliche?
August 10th, 2009 at 11:12 pm
No. I don’t think it was a cliche in 1875…
But I do think that the variations of this sentence: “Happy families are all alike; every unhappy family is unhappy in its own way.” are kind of exhausted today.
August 12th, 2009 at 9:44 am
people love to read about families if they are crazier than their own (sedaris)
August 12th, 2009 at 1:45 pm
Indeed, Craig. And usually the bigger the family, the “crazier” it is.
Pat yourself on the back, Ivo. You most certainly do know how to use Google search.
August 13th, 2009 at 5:55 pm
I am not sure if I’m allowed to comment on “outside” comments (if not, please let me know, Host) but I just wanted to congratulate Dan Powell for the fine three-part critiques. I particularly appreciated and took enjoyment in your parsing of my opening sentence:
http://www.danpowellfiction.com/2009/08/fourth-fiction-first-impressions-part-3.html
The ambiguity was deliberate, but perhaps you are correct in saying that ambiguity has no place in opening sentences.
Nora
August 14th, 2009 at 6:00 pm
Yeah! But even a dog know how to use Google search. I have the book…
But c’mon Nora. That’s just my opinion.
If you’re a writer in this contest, I guess you gotta be open for the most diferent opinions all around the world…
And back to your sentence, I still think it’s too open and you can make this a good or a bad thing.
I wanna read more.
Good luck tonight!
August 14th, 2009 at 6:23 pm
Agree, we can’t really tell if these potential stories are going to be good, we have to wait for round 2 to get a better sense. In a way, it’s a good choice to have a general opening because 1) chances people will dislike it enough to vote you off are reduced, and 2) you can more easily adapt your storyline to whatever challenges are coming next…
Curious to see what Host will have them do for Round 2… hopefully not something too ‘difficult’, I also want to continue writing as a guest participant!
August 14th, 2009 at 8:22 pm
I agree, annasbones. Vagueness may pay off in the earlier rounds, but then again, maybe not. We’ll just have to wait and see. Host just Twittered that the video probably won’t be on the website until midnight. It looks like those of who aren’t nightbirds are going to have to wait until tomorrow morning.
Ivo, have you considered writing an opening sentence? Maybe you could show us what you mean by example…