Comments on: COCO 2

By: Renata

Renata — Tue, 25 Aug 2009 00:25:31 +0000

Tks a lot, Coco! You made my day!
And I laughed a lot about the Ukrainian people! In fact, even tough I´m brazilian, I´m pale as a ghost, (don´t ask me why, ´cause I myself have no idea… ) So, I think I was referring to myself when I wrote it! Now the guy must be white pale too!!

By: Coco

Coco — Mon, 24 Aug 2009 15:13:32 +0000

I to like your storey very much, Renata. you wrote “connecting people my white pale ass”. white? pale? sounds like you are writing about person from Ukraine!

By: Renata

Renata — Mon, 24 Aug 2009 12:46:42 +0000

Coco, I couldn´t say it better than Dan, Felicia and Jordi already did. Can´t agree more.
I really liked your writing, and your “accent”

By: Coco

Coco — Sun, 23 Aug 2009 10:15:55 +0000

thank you dan! i just saw article today about fourth fiction in cyprus newspaper. here is link:
http://www.cyprus-mail.com/news/main.php?id=47423&cat_id=9

very funny to read! it called me a “likely hit” with cyprus reader haha

By: danpowell

danpowell — Sat, 22 Aug 2009 21:39:30 +0000

I agree with Jodi, your writing has an authenticity to it. You point out that the narrator’s first language is Russian clearly to the reader and the voice in your story sounds very real. Powerful and believable stuff. Looking forward to reading more.

By: Coco

Coco — Thu, 20 Aug 2009 11:15:27 +0000

thank you so much Felicia and Jodi for too nice things you say! I am happy you think my bad English gives me unique voice. as for story, I thought in begining i would write silly happy comedy but since this is reality show I decided to write something more real!

By: Jodi Cleghorn

Jodi Cleghorn — Thu, 20 Aug 2009 00:16:15 +0000

I’m with you Felicia. And Coco don’t worry about your grasp of the English language – because it is actually lending a unique “voice” to your writing, an authenticity to your characters and their circumstances.

I won’t deny this story makes me cringe because of the subject matter – which means you are getting your message across loud and clear. A friend of mine worked for MSF in Armenia which is the on sex slave route from the Russia et al down to Europe and the stories she told are still very vivid in my head.

Congratulations for persuing this story.

By: Felicia Fredlund

Felicia Fredlund — Wed, 19 Aug 2009 16:41:40 +0000

This was the first paragraph I read where the internet mentionings wasn’t garishly standing out. *applaud*

By: Constantine Markides

Constantine Markides — Wed, 19 Aug 2009 13:33:44 +0000

Coco, the challenge is to write your opening paragraph – only one paragraph – so I have merged all of your paragraphs into one.